Welcome to Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday. Snippets of ten sentences or less are yours for the reading!
Today’s snippet comes from Book Two of The Black Wing Chronicles ~ Thinking of going with REQUIEM FOR THE BROKEN WING to make it sound less fluffy.
This week’s snippet is from one of the first scenes written for this book which may not make it to the final draft. After the hovercycle accident is determined to be sabotage, Blade is assigned an IC security detail for the premiere of his latest holofeature, The Watchtower. He’s also got extra security that the IC isn’t aware of in the form of his Joy Babe — none other than Bo Barron herself. Despite the danger to Bo, she’s joined him on Cormoran so she can watch his back. If she’s recognized, she’ll be arrested and executed on the spot. She’s taking position and waiting for Blade to run the media gauntlet down the red carpet.
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Bo found her way to the VIP entrance and took up a position that gave her a clear view of both the crowd and the new arrivals. She shifted her weight so she could more quickly reach the compact palm blaster strapped to her thigh. That tiny energy weapon in its shielded holster was a huge risk. It was illegal for Joy Babes to carry energy weapons of any kind. If someone took another shot at Blade, she wanted to be ready. She would deal with the consequences later.
Bladeβs cruiser pulled up to the gate and stopped. Bo took a deeper step into the shadows. Her amber eyes flicked over the crowd and the surrounding buildings.
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Definitely the start of a great scene…though the new title seems a bit long to me (though I agree it’s less fluffy). Not sure…
Thanks. Long title, less fluffy, still not married to it. (shrug)
How will this scene play out? I’m wondering now.
Joan Rivers shoves Ryan Seacrest in front of Blade, taking the bullet meant for him and E! gets the exclusive for it all…and Heidi Klum reveals her own Joy Babe training.
I’m a fan of long titles, so I like this change. As far as the snippet, it’s got a great energy; there’s a tension winding up that makes me desperately interested to see what might or might not happen. Which is what I think makes for good reading. π
Thanks JM! I’m taking the week off from revisions to analyze the plot progression of the first draft for scenes that may or may not be pushing the story along.
Let’s see–IC obviously considers Blade is their man, but they’re after Bo who is covering his back… Plot sounds nicely tangled.
Thank you. Tangled is a good word for it! π
Every gal needs a compact palm blaster – Joy Babe or not. π
Wonderful snippet, and I like the title! π
All the better for strapping to your thigh, right?
Thanks on both counts! π
Aww, so sweet that she’s prepared to take such risks to keep him safe.
Who can resist someone who says “I love you” with death and mayhem?