Saturday Snippet: Research? Riiiiight.

Welcome to Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday. Snippets of ten sentences or less are yours for the reading!

Today’s snippet comes from Book Two of The Black Wing Chronicles ~ and a short story DEATH OF A HOLOFEATURE HERO.

This is a life-altering gunfight for Blade, and it takes place in a theater. Hell of an audition, right?

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“You’re not going in there!” She cried, throwing her arms around his neck again.

Swallowing his annoyance, he pried her loose. “Don’t worry about me,” he said with a grin, slipping easily into the holofeature hero role he’d played ever since he walked away from his Inner Circle career five years earlier. “I’m just going to take a look in the door and see if I can help anyone else get out before the authorities get here. I’m not a hero, I only play one in holofeatures.”

He shrugged her off. Now wasn’t really the time.

“Call it research for my next role.” He nudged her towards the security office. “Go get help.”

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31 thoughts on “Saturday Snippet: Research? Riiiiight.

    1. Very astute observation, Peter! 🙂 That kind of helpless clingy female *would* make excellent bait for a trap for Blade, but he’s known her for years and was once romantically involved with her.

  1. “You’re not going in there!” She cried, throwing her arms around his neck again.

    Lowercase “she” here.

    Swallowing his annoyance, he pried her loose. “Don’t worry about me,” he said with a grin, slipping easily into the holofeature hero role he’d played ever since he walked away from his Inner Circle career five years earlier.

    Don’t make the speech tag long. Just say, “he said.” Any further description should be in a different sentence. I’m guessing he is the type who has a problem dealing with reality if he’s continually played a role for five years. If so, a nice, succint way of showing the reader. I get a picture of a man with commitment issues and a devil-may-care attitude.

    “I’m not a hero, I only play one in holofeatures.”

    I agree with Heidi. Classic line. 😀

    He nudged her towards the security office.

    Americans use “toward”. “Towards” is mostly British. I don’t know if you’re British, though.

    I feel Blade’s annoyance at the woman, which is great. You want the reader to feel. Although I’m hoping this woman isn’t as shallow as she’s made out to be in this snippet.

    1. Thank you for your input.

      Beg to differ with you on your take on the use of toward v. towards. In the American Southern vernacular it is not uncommon to find many traditionally British turns of phrase or words in common use, particularly among Appalachia and the Piedmont regions. This is due to strong ties to our Scots/Irish roots. I and most of my contemporaries use the words interchangeably. Until you mentioned it, I’d never considered one American and the other British. Fascinating that you should see it so.

      I’m glad that you were able to feel his annoyance with her. Twenty-odd years ago, when I was just starting out as a professional writer, the best advice I ever received on writing fiction was that it was vital to evoke emotion in your reader. If you’re not evoking emotion, you may as well be writing cookbooks.

        1. This reminds me of an exchange I had once with a fellow editor at the Tampa Tribune back in the early 90’s. She argued that the word “scurvy” was only used as a noun. I had to prove to her that her dictionary was incomplete by producing a more comprehensive edition that showed the word was also used as an adjective. Since then, I set no store by any dictionary that doesn’t contain the word “sudarium” because I’ve found that if it does not, it is incomplete for my purposes.

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