Welcome to Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday. Snippets of ten sentences or less are yours for the reading!
Today’s snippet comes from Book Three of The Black Wing Chronicles ~ BARRON’S LAST STAND.
Blade and his brother Chase have a favor to ask of an unlicensed doctor working out of her home in a squalid colony. It’s not the first time Blade has sought her help.
Can we please come in?”
Marshall slowly turned to Blade, tearing her eyes from Chase at the last possible second.
“No,” she said. “I haven’t gotten everything repaired from your last friendly visit.”
She stared up at him her eyes large and devoid of amusement. “I have a hole in my wall. The wind and rain come into my house through the hole in my wall. I didn’t want a hole in my wall, but thanks to you I now have a hole in my wall.”
“I can fix the hole in your wall,” Blade said.
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28 thoughts on “Saturday Snippet: Hole In The Wall”
Saying Marshall is unhappy would be a gross understatement. I can definitely feel the emotions flying around the room in this snippet.
I love writing this character. She’s quirky.
I just have a dirty-old-man mind, because I can’t stop thinking about Blade fixing her……well, I’ll leave it at that. Fun little snippet, though. 🙂
Yeah, I knew somebody would take it that way. I thought it would be Cary, though. I guess you beat him to the punch.
He’ll be glad to know that I’m taking over for him. 😛
UGGGHGHGHG! T.M.! Really!?!? Jeeeeeez.
ANYWAY, I liked the dialogue back and forth, particularly Marshall’s “I have a hole in my wall. I didn’t want a hole in my wall.” Very nicely written.
LOL! Of course, he had to go there!
Thanks, S.C. I giggled my way through this scene. Especially the bit that follows about her window.
Indeed, I had to… 🙂
Sounds like things got interesting the last time Blade was there.
It did. There was quite a destructive fight in ARCANA DOUBLE CROSS. That’s what is being referenced here.
A hole in the wall would make me quite upset. Sounds like they’ve got a history. Great snippet!
They do. She helped him before as a favor to someone else and things got out of hand. Blade isn’t exactly her favorite person.
The desperation on Blade’s side is as palpable as Marshall’s reluctance. Makes for a very engaging read.
Thanks, J.M.! He wouldn’t be there if he had any other choice and she knows it.
Man, that hole in the wall is really bugging her! Now it’s bugging me! Good stuff, nice repartee!
TM, you dirty old man who still lives in the body of a thirteen year old! Haha!
My husband in an engineer. I have it on very good authority that the maturity of engineers is stunted.
If by stunted, you mean “totally awesome”… 😛
By stunted, I mean perpetually twelve! LOL! You goofball.
Life was pretty awesome when I was twelve…just saying… 😉
Love the dialogue repetition. A hole in the wall? Yes, a hole. Awesome.
Thanks, Cary! I really loved writing this scene.
It’s very “David Mamet-esque,” but in a good way.
I’ll take that as a compliment!
So, am I to take it that there was a hole in the wall? Great banter and I agree with Cary – the repetition adds to the character.
There was indeed a hole in the wall. 🙂 Thanks.
Can’t really fault her reasoning for saying no… too bad he hadn’t thought to repair that after it happened, eh?
Great dialogue, btw! I really get a sense of her personality…
Thanks! I doubt he had time to make any repairs. Still, kind of rude. 😉